Author’s Note: This piece is based on a picture shown to me
in Language Arts. In the following creative piece I will set the scene for you
to see what was truly behind this picture.
Please look for voice and how it sets a scene in your mind.
I was taking Billy, my horse for a little walk in the dark
woods. Many things that night were
feeling weird, but I just didn’t know what.
The wind was whistling past my ears, like a ghost screaming. After about an hour of riding my horse around,
I felt that something or someone was
moving in the woods. It looked liked
Paul Revere on an invisible horse, but I wasn’t certain. As I came closer to the object, I thought my
mind was playing with me and nothing had occurred.
Still not certain of what I saw, something moved again and I
was certain that the object was running right toward me. In disbelief, Billy and I just stood waiting
to see what was going to occur. As the ground rumbled like a little earthquake, a large figure on an invisible horse came
straight at us and we knew nothing was going to stop it.
Billy turned to run, but fell on a log in the process. The invisible horse slashed right through Billy
and kept running on into the woods until we lost sight of them. As I turn to see the dark bloody wound, there
wasn’t one; all you could see was an invisible line taken off of the horses
neck and upper stomach. In disbelief not
knowing what to do, Billy just stood there tall, just like nothing
happened. Is my mind just playing with
me or what?
I really like this creative piece. I found two points where figurative language is in your piece. You described your thoughts in this piece too which helps the description and the flow of the piece.
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