Author's Note: I wrote this story in the point of view of the shoes I got for Christmas. In this creative piece essay I addressed best sentence structure and where to put commas.
Finishline is always quiet and warm in the early mornings. Not today it is Black Friday, I mean I want to get my sleep, but people are talking with no care in the world. Black Friday again, second year in a row that I have been here. No one even cares about me. The store has rough beds that we sleep on and they just want to make money. They are now opening the doors; well we knew this was going to come sometime.
Wow!! Many people are here, more than I expected. The boys are all run after me; I don’t blame them because I will admit that I am looking fabulous today. Why not buy me when I’m on sale for $90. Kid! Kid! No please don’t put me on, your feet smell horrible I am begging you please don’t try me on.
Nice! Now there is a cool kid that wants to try me on. His feet smell bad; also this person is being a little rough with me. You don’t know how good it feels to be loved and going home. Home Sweet Home!!!!!!
Overall it was a good day, I mean I go home with a nice boy and hopefully I will create new friends on the way to his house. The horrible thing is that I lose my girlfriend, Philly Cheese Steak. Well I guess that my family now could bring me to Subway and buy me a new one!
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